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Saudi Arabia's Healthcare Crunch

I've edited your email to flow well, and connect with the reader. You'll see I reorganized paragraphs, and made changes to sentence structure. I've also rewritten the sentences so they read in the "active" tense. You'll notice good transitions, strong bullet points, and changes in punctuation that help make it easier and more intriguing to read!

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  • janatik1
    janatik1
    • cách đây 4 năm

    Sorry--whose should be "who's." Not sure why that didn't save the change!

    • cách đây 4 năm