Need great English writer for Service ad copy

What we are doing is creating a new service in which we help aspiring musical artist to meet with label executives with the possibility of getting a record deal. Attached is a draft of what the service will entail. What we need from you is to re-write this text for our website to give it some more flair. By flair I mean that we want people to really feel that they will actually be able to meet with a record exec and get signed. We want to excite people so that they will actually use the service. We also want you to write a few ads about this service that we can post on craigslist, facebook, myspace, etc. Please respond with examples of your work and include the word "Rice" in all bids and Pm's